You caught me! ???? I should have started by telling you what I genuinely liked about the story before jumping into the editing.

And, frankly, there is plenty to praise.

Your Moshe-and-Mordechai stories have developed a recognizable voice, and this one has several things going for it:

The opening grabs you immediately. “This one video makes life worth living” is a great line from Moshe. It makes the reader want to know what on earth he is watching.

The dialogue feels natural. You have a knack for making the two characters sound like two guys who have been arguing and joking together for years.

You mix humor with a serious subject. That’s probably the........

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